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Thank you.

Mr B

Monday, May 31, 2010

what a day!!!

I pushed of from the wall, I was coming third. My freestyle arms goning round and round.
I could win I knew it I just had to speed up. I'm on my second length and I'm coming second until
someone comes up behind me ,it's my third lap and I am coming second then just at
the end I over take her. I win and I'm proud but it isn't over yet I still need to win my breaststroke and
butterfly to get the real trophie, and now I'ts breststroke. The whistle blows I dive in "onley one length
onley one length" I think to my self. Then I realise I'm winning I really am my hand touchs the wall I leap out
and throw my hands in the air "one more to go". "year 8 butterfly" the man calls through the speaker. we all line up I have to win I whisper GO!! calls the man through the specker I dive in doing my fastest caterpiller I'm wining until somone comes
up behind me "blast it" I said but all that came out was bubbles but then I did it I over took her and I got presented my trophie and I heard the loudst aplause ever, what a day!!!

3 comments:

  1. Congratulations on your wins. It was very well written. You sound like a good swimmer in your story. I hope we get to read more stories from you. Keep going you might make the Olympics :)

    We voted and decided that our class will give you 7 out of 10 for your story :) Well done.
    Room 5JP St Patricks School Greymouth

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  2. cool lib I give you a 9\10 you just need to have parograves.

    Danielle

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